Already looks good enough to call finished, but I admire your tenacity. I love the eyes.

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Blackened Wing: Gothic Angel Art by Carter Bowles

Thanks! Since I'm very new to portraits, i'm trying to get them just right, even though the piece probably stands alone now. The eyes worked out nicely. The original photograph has a wonderful attitude.

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"There's an open wound placed upon my heart in anger's rage." -Seabeast

"I'm just like you, I put my pants on one leg at a time. Only, once my pants are on, I make gold records."

I'm not sure if the ad libbing is working for me. The way the head is attached to the neck and the angle of the body do not seem to match. It seems too unnatural. I am intrigued. How does a nude female youth fit into the theme of alone in a crowd? Could you clarify?

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Art is scholarship and research - Karen Kleinfelder

Honestly, I thought it was a finished piece. Probably one of the better ones I've seen browsing through painting>ortraits

Can't wait to see how the finished piece has developed. Although, the far shoulder looks off, or maybe it's something else that makes it look off. But the angle seems wrong which makes her seem wrong.

I agree that the perspective on her shoulder is a bit off. Although she is standing askew--making the front shoulder drop and the back shoulder rise.

Thanks for commenting!

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"There's an open wound placed upon my heart in anger's rage." -Seabeast

"I'm just like you, I put my pants on one leg at a time. Only, once my pants are on, I make gold records."

Check out the original photo by hakanphotography. I believe I've been true to the actual photo in terms of the neck and head. The angle of the body is still being worked on, as I mentioned above...but you are correct that it does need refinement.

As for the title, well, that's up to the photographer who took it. Whatever that person was thinking is really up to them I suppose and it's up to interpretation for us!

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"There's an open wound placed upon my heart in anger's rage." -Seabeast

"I'm just like you, I put my pants on one leg at a time. Only, once my pants are on, I make gold records."

The picture is longer than your picture plane yet you made the figure too small and instead of correcting the drawing you made up parts that did not necessarily need to be there. I suggest using a grid next time or just simply use closer more detailed observation of the linear structure. You should try and use the atmospheric perspective the original employed, because it really brings the sitter's profile into to focus, and that is the element that makes the picture really stand out. Lastly try to render the color temperature more closely I see none of the reflecting greens from the original picture in your painting. If it were mine I would redo the entire drawing composition instead of fighting with the issues during the painting portion.

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Art is scholarship and research - Karen Kleinfelder

Thank you for your constructive advice. As I said in the original picture post, it's still a WIP and I plan to do some color correction. The greens that come back on her face and body are very important and they will not be left out. As far as the overall composition, I don't have a problem with creating some more body to fit the canvas. I certainly prefer to avoid gridding out a painting. There's something flat and mechanical about that to me, although it may work for others. It just seems a little "paint by numbers" if you know what I mean. As for the body, I also intend to adjust her positioning, but don't think it's effect is as catastrophic as you seem to suggest.

In the end, it won't be perfect. This is my forth portrait, so I have a long way to go. Again-thank you for your points. They help me to crystalize the areas I need to address.

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"There's an open wound placed upon my heart in anger's rage." -Seabeast

"I'm just like you, I put my pants on one leg at a time. Only, once my pants are on, I make gold records."

Yes, correct the positioning as much as you can just pay attention to the drawing. You are welcome. Years from now you can look back on this as a learning experience.

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Art is scholarship and research - Karen Kleinfelder